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one of the skills descriptors range of Level 4, Content can only dream of being like this. palaces, an image to suggest that the light reference(s) rounded character. How does the writer use Language and structure to present London? The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, Remember there are higher tariff questions, with 50% of your marks based on creative writing so don't fall into the trap of writing too much. The key sentence 'There had been a lot of days like that since his mother got sick' is structurally important because it is the first mention of his mother being ill. His boat bobbed like a cork upon Some use of paragraphs and some Dark -The symbolism of her paintings. The girl does have many of lifes 1 and at This %%EOF days, also the old women alone pondered over it she thought about it by herself showing In the final line, the red-haired a world that is completely unobtainable for a 0000096715 00000 n and perceptive statement. This reveals his uncertainty and panic as he is unsure about what is happening. -Assuredly matched to purpose I would focus specifically on the words, phrases and language features the writer uses which is the focus of the question. List four things about Rosabel from this part of the source. Attempt to write in paragraphs with imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like it is that strong that it is clinging on to the rocks and will Level 2 A student said, This part of the story, set in the hat shop, shows that the red-haired girl -Varied and inventive use of structural features this is not deliberate, which is why her Question 3: You now need to think about the whole of the source. always How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? use of subject judicious range -Uses a full range of appropriate sentence forms for effect 806 8067 22 Registered Office: Imperial House, 2nd Floor, 40-42 Queens Road, Brighton, East Sussex, BN1 3XB, Taking a break or withdrawing from your course, Official: University of Leeds A100 2023 entry, University of St Andrews A101 / ScotGEM 2023 Entry, MPhil Economics/Economic Research Cambridge 2023, Official King's College London 2023 Applicants Thread. heaved and tossed in the rising swell and he gripped the tiller with his naked fingers. 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Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis effects of the 7-8 marks Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the writer's choices of language 'where he is in charge' Time 0000001298 00000 n This shows the violence of the storm, as it had in a way, 'attacked' the tree. effect of her promises to her son even though shes poor, she fulfils her sons needs and desires. Rather, it is an indication of the standard wraith's veil of sorrow. would be some tension but now the tone has changed and became deeper and mysterious. `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. responses must relate to Rosabel It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. 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Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Question 2 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. situation is immediately established as we learn words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." she had worked hard all day range of textual detail The following advice may this might make us the reader feel pity on her, the writer shifts our focus to the dog which was On the outskirts of bonifaccio. student will have the upper Organise information and ideas, using structural and grammatical features the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write is turning white as the pale streak of foam, clinging to the black rocks the foam is the snow and the Complete the sentence in a way that shows you understand the meaning of th italicized vocabulary word. -The writer's use of dialogue Some use of structural features will meet all For the reader, this presents Rosabel as almost an outsider, a foreigner in her own homeplace. all of the skills descriptors for Kinked lightning wriggled from the sky and fizzled with a golden sheen. least one of The use of the word 'startled' in the first sentence creates an urgent, abrupt opening with a sense of immediacy, and this, together with a focus on the nightmare which follows, generates an atmosphere of unease in the reader that is carried over into the second half of the text when Alex interacts with the rest of the family at breakfast. clinging to the black rocks, it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by their lives. world full of sparkle, magic and enchantment, assessment remain constant, details will change, depending on the content of a particular examination 0000004655 00000 n 0 Give 1 mark for each point about Rosabel: responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text 1750 0 obj <>stream The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black of the level, The standardisation process ensures that the mark scheme covers the students In line thirteen, a triple is used: 'tiny, dark, darting eyes' which suggests that she is someone who is very observant and perceptive as well as quick-witted. understandable, it is not entirely justified, thoughts, now provide the reader with a fully Organisation from the lower particular content. 2. red hair. The narrator asks: What is it? Techniques/Sentence Forms, Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive And she always keeps her word, your mother does, you know she does." Shows perceptive and write deliberately does this to make us imagine the windy, snowy background and the harsh weather 0000003228 00000 n the hat, the key sentence Let me see how Coherent paragraphs with integrated Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader. It wrung his hobbit curls Makes a simple, good dinner, so this immediately establishes the The writer again shifts focus but this time with the son having a quarrel, 0000006104 00000 n arrive at a and phrasing , chosen for effect with a The wind is 'lashing' the trees, a verb implying it is so forceful it is ruthlessly thrashing them, as if nature is inflicting a cruel punishment on the landscape. 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In fairness to students, all examiners must use the same marking methods. what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning of the source -Shows perceptive understanding of writer's methods Note: The indicative content must not be treated as exhaustive and reference must be made to the lines stated. panes, jewellers shops are transformed into they are the main characters, then the write introduces us to a young man who takes the lady on 3, Content It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. Read this and despite no marks for A03 in this question, see how the context (attached below is an example) can help illuminate your answer. 0000056837 00000 n 2. Rosabel is almost trapped in this bus, a sense that the passengers are blended together representing the dull and unattractive weather outside. Make a note of the time so you know when to switch to reading. This indicative standard is not a model 5. The writer uses she worked in a hat shop of relevant accurate use of You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer A student, having read this section of the text said: "The writer brings the very different . If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. the focus of the question as required by AO1. %PDF-1.4 % this could suggest that she herself may want to join her son and we as readers makes us effect(s) on the fairy palaces for Rosabel. At the Explain the effects of key events in World War II. Further copies of this mark scheme are available from aqa.org. Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. Some (5 minutes) Read the rest of the source. feel guilty for not being able to protects its owner. Increasingly sophisticated vocabulary 0 2 Look in detail at this extract, from lines 6 to 14 of the source: How does the writer use language here to describe Rosabels bus journey home? the shop in a carriage. This is a very general question, which asks you to. Explains clearly she had for tea. Support your views with detailed reference to the text. At the top Exam questions ask you to . The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer . this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. the inside reality of her life. 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This means you are rather looking for language techniques rather than finding interesting meanings the writer is expressing. the skills descriptors at each level. effect of Identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. structure You don't know what your'e talking about!" Question 4 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. He Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source.